We looked at listing sentences and the patterns we noticed in his writing.
Using his example we created our own writing based on our Camp at Mountain Valley.
I will know I’ve been successful when I have:
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OUR TOWNThe town was usual enough; it hadA creek, a bridge, a beach a skyOver it, and even a small tin churchI never went to. My brother, my cousins and IDid what boys do- dozed in the hotSchoolroom, made bows and arrows, dodged the madBoat builder, crept like rabbits through the blackUnder-runners with a weak torch,Burnt dry rushes, wrestled or swamDoing nothing important.By James K Baxter |
The camp was usual enough; it had
A playground , a river , a bridge and even a mud course which I found hard.
Me, Evie, Mac, Allegra and Phebot did things that girls do-spilled water on each other, told jokes to each other like clowns, made silly noises, chatted all night, be silly, did talent contests.
Doing nothing important
By Poppy
Mountain Valley camp was usual enough;
It had cabins, trees, a little waterfall, dogs and a very big river we went rafting on. Evie and I did what girls do- chat, play in the mud, run around on the grass, swim in the river and ride the horses. Everyone was shining their torches in the tents, getting scratched by the blackberry bush and eating marshmallows.
Doing nothing important.
By Allegra
Mountain Valley camp was unusual enough;
It had horses, white water rafting archery, a massive 2KM!!!!!!! Mud run, shooting and morning runs.
We did what boys do- annoy each other, run around kicking balls and throwing frisbees.
Doing nothing important.
By Austin
Camp was usual enough;
It had horses, a river, cabins, smelly mud, dogs, slides, tents, swamps,
fires, it even had blackberries and a playground. Forgot to mention the toilets!
Blake and I were doing what boys do- falling in mud, hiding from people and splashing people. Tyler, Salvador, Ben, Blake and I stayed up in the tents and the cabins.
Doing nothing important.
By Sam B
